I wrote this poem and i need some feedback on it. :) (Girls only)?
Issue by Jay W.: I wrote this poem and i require some feedback on it. 
(Ladies only)?
It’s named “Lady Within”, generally because i see that the bulk of females are taken benefit of and left damaged hearted and i know they deserve much better. From what i hear, not a lot of guys have respect for girls, and if they do, very tiny, and like i stated ahead of, they deserve far better therapy plain and easy.
Anyway, hope u like it.
When folks think of the lovely girls in the world
They only appear to feel of females with wonderful waist lines
Women with an alluring, viloptuous chest
With gorgeous eyes and the confront of a goddess
Females with legs that can persuade any man
These are the girls that only a blind man follows
For me even so,
That is all just a mask
A cloud of darkness,
That i decide on to let pass by
Since most girls select to best their bodies and physical figures
A lot more than tuning the spiritual and psychological girl within
The real girl a man really should look for
Is not strolling out on the catwalk,
Modeling the latest trend developments
Or sticking out her leg on a roadside
Looking to hitch a journey to commit sinful acts against the heart
She’s waiting inside of her individual heart
Waiting to be located, loved, and cherished
By a guy who truly loves and cares about the angel within
The actual angel inside her heart
Whose only daily life-extended wish is to be cherished and appreciated
Instead of ridiculed, overlooked and forgotten
That is the lady that I will Often fall in enjoy with
I can fall in really like with any lady physically anyday
But until finally you’ve fallen in adore with the angel inside of her heart
You will be like all the other guys in the globe
Who fall in adore with the mask
Who fall in adore with the costume and make up a man or woman wears
The scapegoat that a female puts out in front of you
That you only decide on to see with your eyes
And not the actual elegance within of her heart
You’re only in enjoy with a fake
Only with a lie
Only with a mirage, an illusion
Who will shortly fade away
Into dust and nothingness.
And as the inspirational quote that i thought off that inspired me to create this was “A gentleman that falls in enjoy with blinded eyes is a fool, but a guy that cherishes the heart is a genuine champion.”
Best reply:
Solution by cassie58
It’s what’s inside of that counts, not appearances and I am happy that your poem reflects that is what you experience. Everything on the outside is candyfloss. I don’t see the bulk of women becoming left damaged hearted and taken advantage of though. It performs the other way round. My nephew has just been left broken hearted. Also I have not however a guy who is not respectful of me and my feelings – probably I am just fortunate. Hope you meet the female of your dreams – nice poem
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